The chart shows the participation by young people in sports by gender in Great Britain.

The chart shows the participation by young people in sports by gender in Great Britain.
The bar graph illustrates the percentage of youngsters
participation
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in sports divided by gender in the United Kingdom in 2019.
Overall
, the number of people who took
parts
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in cycling was the highest,
whereas
the lowest was tennis. Throughout
this
year there was a wide gap between the two groups in football.
To begin
with, football had the highest number of male participants, with almost 70%, rather than females which
more
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than three times lower. Slightly more boys
were
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participated in cycling with 5% more than women.
However
, there was a significant gap between the two former sports and tennis, which
it
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only gained hardly 30%, and 5% higher than girls.
On the other hand
, women exceeded men in swimming which accounted
at
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more than 50%,
while
men less than half.
In contrast
, the second highest category for women is
roller blading
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, though hiking showed similar proportions,
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less than 30%, respectively.
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