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Due to the development of the internet, public libraries are no longer necessary. Do you agree or disagree?

#development #internet #libraries
Local
libraries
 have become less imperative for the citizens as the interweb started to surge. Some believe that they are not useful anymore. I firmly believe that city
libraries
 are still rendering
services
 to
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society and they have the privilege to have them because they are a decent place to study, work and for innovation.
To begin
 with, public
libraries
 are still prevalent and utilized by many students, researchers and business workers. It not only provides physical books, research articles,
journal
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 and
newspaper
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newspapers
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 but
also
 gives adequate time and space
with
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quiet
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a quiet
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 and peaceful environment.
For example
, they often provide internet access,
sometime
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 laptops and computer
services
 too if needed, that are mainly used for searching
new
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 things online related to their subject matter and for completing
works
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. Normally, users who like to study, focus and concentrate in
tranquil
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 environment tend to visit and use it frequently.
Thus
, if they would actually disappear, they will lose the benefits of having it for many purposes.
Furthermore
, if these crucial
services
would get
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 closed, users will face difficulties and
couldn't
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won't
 be able to complete their
project
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projects
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 and tasks.
For instance
, writers often use library
facility
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facilities
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 and present their new books to
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the librarian
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librarian
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librarians
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 in
libraries
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, and
these
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there
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 are even
other artist
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another artist
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such
 as song
writer
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writers
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,
story
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and story
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 and poem
creator
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creators
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 that creates
the
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work in these areas. It is indeed explicit at
this
 time that
libraries
 have to be opened more and innovation of new
libraries
 would be appreciated tremendously. In conclusion,
libraries
 are the most essential public
services
 and
it
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they
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 should be valued more and more in every rural and urban
sites
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. I totally
disagrees
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 with
this
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the
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 notion that these locations
seems
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 no longer necessary because it really gives enough time and support to the students, workers and entrepreneurs.
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