In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some
people
argue that,in some nations
the government should manage and cap the Add a comma
nations,
amoumt
of salaries Correct your spelling
amount
people
earn,as a small number of individuals are high wage
earners.Add a hyphen
high-wage
while
limiting high salary
would bring more equality,I believe that Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
people
who are highly skilled and talented should be rewarded with high salaries.
On the one hand,capping high wages narrow
the Correct subject-verb agreement
narrows
gab
between rich and poor Correct your spelling
gap
people
's daily life
in Fix the agreement mistake
lives
the
society.limiting the miney of abundantly paid employees means adding more funding for public services which will benefit all the Correct article usage
apply
people
in the community evenly.This
means the government can provide good quality of
civil services which Change preposition
apply
acn
be free or affordable for those who earn minimum wages.Correct your spelling
can
For example
,in 2020 Luxembourg became the first country to provide free public transport such
as bus
,trams and trains Fix the agreement mistake
buses
accross
its entire territory.
Correct your spelling
across
On the other hand
,it is indisputable that men and women who are specialized in particular
proffesions
and well experienced should be paid exceedingly. Correct your spelling
professions
This
means people
who work persistently and strenuously to attain their goal
and make extra efforts to advance the qualifications they Fix the agreement mistake
goals
got
,should be Verb problem
have
reward
based on their expertness Wrong verb form
rewarded
qith
Correct your spelling
with
out
any limitations.Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
,this
also
inspire
young generations to follow their dreams and surpass challenges.Change the verb form
inspires
For example
,according to
a
research in Correct article usage
apply
2020
the most Add a comma
2020,
favorite
profession by students aged between 12 and 16 was science, as it Change the spelling
favourite
have
Change the verb form
has
abundance
of Add an article
an abundance
career
and opportunities.
In conclusion,controlling and restricting the amount of money for those who earn ample can Fix the agreement mistake
careers
results
similar standard way of living in a country,Wrong verb form
result
however
,I believe that wages should be unlimited for experts and professionals who have the abilities to revolutionize our planet in different aspect
of our lives.Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
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