Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed.
The given map shows Brandfield surrounded by
city
planners which decided to build a new shopping mall
in area
with two sides S1 and S2. Add an article
the area
an area
Overall
, it can be seen that the
both Correct article usage
apply
of
models of Change preposition
apply
building
Add an article
a building
the building
located
close to the Add a missing verb
are located
city
centre but different
two sides.
Change preposition
on different
To begin
, the first possible shop center
is located on the north Change the spelling
centre
side
of city
centre and near the Housing Estate. Add an article
the city
Also
S1 buildingAdd a missing verb
is
railway
, Correct article usage
a railway
road
and the river flows Correct word choice
and road
the
east Change preposition
on the
side
of mall
Correct article usage
the mall
center
.
The second possible mall
center
is located on the east Change the spelling
centre
side
of city
Add an article
the city
center
and on the north Change the spelling
centre
side
of Industrial
Estate. Correct article usage
the Industrial
Also
around the S2 building
there are Add a comma
building,
road
and Fix the agreement mistake
roads
railway
.
Correct article usage
a railway
For
my opinion the best proposal for Change the preposition
In
mall
Correct article usage
the mall
center
Change the spelling
centre
the
first option is suitable.Add a missing verb
is the
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to provide a clear introduction that outlines what your essay will cover without mixing details about the sites. Use appropriate paragraphing to separate your descriptions of S1 and S2.
coherence cohesion
Use more cohesive devices such as 'furthermore', 'however', or 'in contrast' to connect your ideas more clearly and show the relationships between them.
coherence cohesion
Make your conclusion more distinct by summarizing the advantages and/or disadvantages of each site before stating your opinion. A concluding statement can help to make your argument more persuasive.
task achievement
Ensure you fully respond to the task by not only describing the sites but also mentioning why one might be preferable over the other based on the map's information.
task achievement
Develop your main points with clearer, more comprehensive descriptions of each potential site, mentioning more specific elements from the map and considering the implications of each feature for the shoppers or the city.
task achievement
Provide specific examples or reasoning as to why certain features in the map might impact the suitability of the mall site. This could involve discussing the proximity to other city areas, transport links, or potential environmental impacts.
Fully explain your ideas
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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