The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The diagram illustrates the brick manufacturing
process
.
Overall
, it can be seen that the are seven stages in the
process
,
first
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The first
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is digging up the
clay
and finishing with
delivery
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the delivery
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of brick to the construction.
To begin
,
first
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step of
process
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the process
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is
excavator
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the excavator
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is
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dinged the
clay
from the ground. After
that
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that,
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the
clay
growth
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grows
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through
metal
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the metal
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grid, which
brakes
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breaks
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the
clay
to
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into
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the
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small pieces and
roller
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a roller
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assist
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assists
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to
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in
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the
process
.
Then
sand and water are put
to
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into
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the
clay
and
makes
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make
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mixture
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a mixture
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. Mixture put the wire culler for the making
bricks
, before going to the drying oven.
Drying
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The drying
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process
takes 24-48 hours.
Following
this
dried
bricks
go through moderate. Next
of
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this
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heating in a kiln and temperature
change
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changes
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200
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from 200
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C-
1300
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to 1300
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C. The
bricks
are cooled in the cooling chamber between 48-72 hours. After the
bricks
are packed and
finally
they are delivered to the construction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, clay, bricks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacture
  • brick(s)
  • building industry
  • digging
  • extraction
  • raw material
  • clay
  • mixing
  • moulding
  • wire cutting
  • drying oven
  • firing
  • kiln
  • high temperatures
  • hardening
  • cooling
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • traditional
  • modern
  • environmental considerations
  • sustainability practices
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