The charts below give information about the world’s top three producers of four different dairy products in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts above
gives
information about three countries or institutions Change the verb form
give
who
dominated Correct pronoun usage
that
world
production of four dairy products, namely Correct article usage
the world
milk
, cheese, butter, and milk
powder. The names of the top producers differ in each products
. But interestingly, the European Union (Change to a singular noun
product
EU
) remained as
one of the top contributors.
It is evident that countries mostly Change preposition
apply
produced
Wrong verb form
produce
milk
. Sitting at the top, the EU
produced a huge amount of milk
in 2012 with the amount of 142,970 metric tonnes
or equals
to 142,970,000 kg. Meanwhile, India followed by the United States produced less, 127,000 and 90,038 metric Replace the word
equal
tonnes
respectively. As for cheese products, the EU
also
produces the most around 7,000 metric tonnes
. By contrast
, the third top cheese producers
, Fix the agreement mistake
producer
that is
Brazil, only contributes 700 metric tonnes
. The EU
's rank shifted in the
butter and Correct article usage
apply
milk
powder productions
. It ranked second in the production of butter below India and above the United States and ranked third in the production of Fix the agreement mistake
production
milk
powder below China and New Zealand.
In a nutshell, the EU
dominate the world dairy productions
alongside other countries, Fix the agreement mistake
production
such
as India, China, New Zealand, and Brazil.Submitted by abigailsaragih on
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