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The charts below give information about the world’s top three producers of four different dairy products in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the world’s top three producers of four different dairy products in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts above
gives
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 information about three countries or institutions
who
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 dominated
world
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the world
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 production of four dairy products, namely
milk
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, cheese, butter, and
milk
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 powder. The names of the top producers differ in each
products
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product
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. But interestingly, the European Union (
EU
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) remained
as
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one of the top contributors. It is evident that countries mostly
produced
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milk
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. Sitting at the top, the
EU
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 produced a huge amount of
milk
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 in 2012 with the amount of 142,970 metric
tonnes
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 or
equals
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 to 142,970,000 kg. Meanwhile, India followed by the United States produced less, 127,000 and 90,038 metric
tonnes
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 respectively. As for cheese products, the
EU
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also
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 produces the most around 7,000 metric
tonnes
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.
By contrast
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, the third top cheese
producers
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producer
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,
that is
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 Brazil, only contributes 700 metric
tonnes
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. The
EU
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's rank shifted in
the
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apply
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butter and
milk
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 powder
productions
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production
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. It ranked second in the production of butter below India and above the United States and ranked third in the production of
milk
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 powder below China and New Zealand. In a nutshell, the
EU
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 dominate the world dairy
productions
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production
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 alongside other countries,
such
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 as India, China, New Zealand, and Brazil.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, eu, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dairy products
  • Producers
  • Cheese
  • Butter
  • Skimmed milk powder
  • Whole milk powder
  • Global production
  • Metric tonnes
  • Leading
  • Specialize
  • Volume
  • Trends
  • Geographical distribution
  • Significant
  • Comparisons
  • Dominate
  • Sector
  • Diversity
  • Contribution
  • Agricultural output
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