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Mrs. Barrett, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours a day next summer. write a letter to Mrs. barrettes your letter suggest how you could help her in her home Say why you would like to do this work Explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs. Barrett, My self Ashu Verma,
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 am writing
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 letter as a response to your advertisement. I would like to inform you that I am available for
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 job position.
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 I am working at Day-Care with working hours from 4pm to 8pm. I can work for you any day in the morning I could help you
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 house chores
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for
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 example, cooking, washing, cleaning,
groceries
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and groceries
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, the reason I am looking for another job is the
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 hours and the salary provided by my current job which do not meet my daily expenses. I will be so grateful working for you, I am a patient person
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 caring. I look forward
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 from you Your
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sincerely
, Ashu Verma
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structure
Ensure that your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Additionally, use paragraphs to organize your ideas effectively, with each paragraph discussing a different aspect of your offer to help Mrs. Barrett.
greeting and closing
Remember to use appropriate greetings and sign-offs for formal letters. Instead of 'My self Ashu Verma,' you can start with 'Dear Mrs. Barrett,' followed by an introduction of yourself. At the end of the letter, consider using 'Yours sincerely' before your name to maintain a formal tone.
content
Try to expand on your reasons for wanting to work with Mrs. Barrett with more specific examples or experiences that demonstrate your suitability for the role.
accuracy
Avoid any grammatical errors and typos to ensure clarity and professionalism. Double-check your letter for any mistakes before sending it.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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