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The chart below shows the changes in gross domestic product (GDP) in Western Cape between 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in gross domestic product (GDP) in Western Cape between 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts present data on the
percentage
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 of
GDP
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 the UK gained every two years from 1992 to 2000 from the IT
industry
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 and
service
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industry
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. Over the years, the IT
industry
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contributes
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 the highest to
UK's
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the UK's
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GDP
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. The
percentage
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 of its contribution when juxtaposed with the
service
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industry's
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industry
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 showed a totally different trend. The IT
industry
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 contributions went up each year with quite significant
addition
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. Meanwhile, the
service
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industry
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grown
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 at a steady pace. The IT
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industry
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industry's
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 contribution to
UK's
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the UK's
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GDP
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 soared in 2000 with
the
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percentage
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 of around 15%. Its contribution has grown around 9% since it scored the lowest in 1992 with only 6%.
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 the same year, the
service
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industry
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 reached its highest
GDP
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percentage
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 in 2000 at around 8% and the lowest in 1992 at around 4%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, gdp, industry, service with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Economic indicator
  • Timeframe
  • Trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Sector
  • Contribution
  • Correlation
  • Percentage
  • Increase/decrease
  • Significant
  • Policy
  • Economic crisis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Steady
  • Overview
  • Observation
  • Speculate
  • Summarize
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