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you are looking for a full time job. write a letter to an employent agency. introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have

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Dear Sir, I am writing to inform you that I am searching for a permanent job for myself. Currently, I have a part-time job at a restaurant. On
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top of that, I hold a graduation degree in the food chain. As far as
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kind jobs are concerned,
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 prefer to do
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 at any food court as
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 in that field. Plus,
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also
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 care jobs since these services have adequate remuneration.
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 have 2 years experience as a
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 chain and
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 have acquainted with multiple skills ranging from communication,customer satisfactions to
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 issues. your cooperation in
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 would greatly
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. yours faithfully,
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your letter follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, developed body paragraphs, and an appropriate conclusion. Each paragraph should be well-organized and focus on a single point. Make sure to use linking words effectively to connect ideas.
Greeting and Closing
Start with a more formal greeting, such as 'Dear Hiring Manager,' and close your letter with 'Yours sincerely,' followed by your full name. Ensure that the opening and closing are suitable for formal correspondence.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Make sure each paragraph presents a single idea linked to the main purpose of the letter. Keep your writing focused and avoid mixing different ideas within one paragraph.
Complete Response
Thoroughly address all three tasks mentioned in the prompt: introduce yourself, explain the sort of job you would like, and discuss your experience and skills. Make sure to provide enough detail for each section to fully satisfy the prompt.
Suitable Writing Tone
Maintain a formal and polite tone throughout the letter to reflect the professionalism expected in correspondence with a potential employer or employment agency.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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