The chart below shows the changes in gross domestic product (GDP) in Western Cape between 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
illustrate
compare the Change the verb form
illustrates
propotion
of Western Correct your spelling
proportion
Cape
's gross domestic product generated by two
industries - IT and Service
- from 1990 to 2000.
Overall
, in a decade, the IT industry
's contribution to Western Cape
's gross domestic product was always higher than Service
industry
. Additionally
, both of the two
industries maintain
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maintained
growing
during the whole period, except for Replace the word
growth
IT
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the IT
industry
faced a slightly
decrease in 1996.
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slight
It is clear that
the development of IT
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the IT
industry
was significantly better than Services. Although
the IT industry
confronted a decrease in 1996, which was totally less than 1%, it did not affect that IT industry
finally
rised
to almost 15%, which Correct your spelling
risen
rose
rise
exceed
doubling the data Wrong verb form
exceeded
recoded
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recorded
at
1992 by itself. Change preposition
in
Additionally
, even the
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though the
service
industry
's performance did not as bright as the IT Correct your spelling
industry
industy
, it still gradually increased from 4% to 8% Correct your spelling
industry
by
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at
the
speed of Correct article usage
a
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less
lass
than 1% every Correct your spelling
less
two
years,
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apply
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except
expect
for the period from 1992 to 1994 which increased around 2%,
Looking into the information for more details, In 1992, Correct your spelling
except
IT
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the IT
industry
only provided a little bit higher than 6% of GDP
to Western Correct article usage
the GDP
Cape
and meanwhile, the GDP
of the companies in service
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the service
industry
was two thirds
of Add a hyphen
two-thirds
IT's
companies. Change noun form
IT
However
, in 2000, the firms in IT
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the IT
industry
produced almost 16% of the total Western Cape
's GDP
, which was probably 2 times of
the Change preposition
apply
GDP
generated by service
Add an article
the service
industry
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cape, two, service, industry, gdp with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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