A friend of yours recently gave you a nice birthday present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, – thank her for the present and say why you particularly like it – describe some other presents that you received – explain some of the things you did on your birthday.

#friend #birthday

Dear Rocky, I hope

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letter finds you in radiant health and you are doing well. I am writing

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letter to thank you and express my feelings about the gift you presented

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birthdayevent

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birthday event

First,

I would like to thank you for attending the program

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last

Sunday, which was my 20th birthday,

and

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I was over the moon as you were presented

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beautiful iPhone 14 Pro Max which was my dream

gadgets

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device has a plethora of special features particularly its design and expandable storage facilities which

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I like most. Since a number of

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my friends

also

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invited

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this

program, I have received numerous

others

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gifts from them including

smartwatch

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, a pair of shoes from

Adidas

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brand, and a number of valuable books.

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, I was really overwhelmed to get these gifts from my friends

as well as

relatives. As you know, I used to play

guitar

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since childhood and

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is because I have tried to perform in the event by playing the guitar

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a famous English song with a view to

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birthday celebration program enjoyable. All the best. Best wishes, Messi

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Use clear paragraphing to separate ideas. Ensure each paragraph contains a single idea or theme.

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Use a range of cohesive devices to link your ideas effectively, such as conjunctions and referencing words.

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Avoid informal language and inappropriate contractions for a semi-formal tone suitable for a letter to a friend.

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
16Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

194 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

cherished memory
symbolic gesture
personal growth
unique qualities
unwavering support
profound impact
joy and prosperity
treasured moments
heartfelt wishes
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