A friend of yours recently gave you a nice birthday present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, – thank her for the present and say why you particularly like it – describe some other presents that you received – explain some of the things you did on your birthday.

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Dear Rocky, I hope

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letter finds you in radiant health and you are doing well. I am writing

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letter to thank you and express my feelings about the gift you presented

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birthdayevent

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birthday event

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I would like to thank you for attending the program

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apply

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last

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Sunday, which was my 20th birthday,

and

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I was over the moon as you were presented

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with a

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beautiful iPhone 14 Pro Max which was my dream

gadgets

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device has a plethora of special features particularly its design and expandable storage facilities which

are

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I like most. Since a number of

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my friends

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also

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invited

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program, I have received numerous

others

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gifts from them including

smartwatch

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a smartwatch

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, a pair of shoes from

Adidas

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the Adidas

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brand, and a number of valuable books.

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, I was really overwhelmed to get these gifts from my friends

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relatives. As you know, I used to play

guitar

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since childhood and

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is because I have tried to perform in the event by playing the guitar

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a famous English song with a view to

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birthday celebration program enjoyable. All the best. Best wishes, Messi

faisalmahamoodThu Jan 18 2024

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Coherence and Cohesion

Use clear paragraphing to separate ideas. Ensure each paragraph contains a single idea or theme.

Coherence and Cohesion

Maintain consistency in verb tenses to provide clarity and coherence.

Coherence and Cohesion

Avoid repetitive sentence structures to enhance readability and flow.

Coherence and Cohesion

Use a range of cohesive devices to link your ideas effectively, such as conjunctions and referencing words.

Task Achievement

Respond to all aspects of the task in sufficient detail, covering each bullet point in the task sufficiently.

Task Achievement

Avoid informal language and inappropriate contractions for a semi-formal tone suitable for a letter to a friend.

Task Achievement

Check for and correct grammatical errors to improve the accuracy of your writing.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

194 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

cherished memory
symbolic gesture
personal growth
unique qualities
unwavering support
profound impact
joy and prosperity
treasured moments
heartfelt wishes
lasting happiness

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Young people learn more about good behaviour from books or films/ movies than they learn from real-life experiences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?