Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, it has become very common to witness young individuals learning a foreign language. The statistics demonstrate that 40 per cent of these learners are
studing
Correct your spelling
studying
in primary schools and about 30 per cent are secondary
school's
Change noun form
school
show examples
students. There are some advantages
such
as being able to immigrate
in
Change preposition
at
show examples
their
Change the word
an
show examples
early age and study from websites of other countries,
however
, some disadvantages are included as well. In
this
essay, I will explore the pros and cons of
this
and try to draw some conclusions. One of the major benefits of doing
this
at primary
school
is that the opportunity of immigration will have happened by their eighteens.
For instance
, in 2002, more than half of the immigrants to Canada were teenagers who studied
english
Change the capitalization
English
show examples
at the
begining
Correct your spelling
beginning
years of their
school
. Yet,
Change preposition
at in
show examples
in
Correct your spelling
an
show examples
early
ages
Fix the agreement mistake
age
show examples
,
human
Add an article
the human
show examples
brain can gain a lot of information quickly and well, which makes the learning
proccess
Correct your spelling
process
faster. Another main advantage of
this
is that they can watch movies or read books in the language they have learnt which makes them more literate than others when they are in secondary or high
school
.
More over
Correct your spelling
Moreover
show examples
, they will be able to communicate with people who
leave
Correct your spelling
live
show examples
abroad.
On the other hand
, the main drawback which many families
dont
Correct your spelling
don't
let their child
to
Change the verb form
apply
show examples
begin at that age is that the young individuals might get frustrated
of
Change preposition
with
show examples
studing
Correct your spelling
studying
which would lead them to obtain low scores, and as a child,
this
would lower their confidence.
For example
, in an interview with these young teenagers in 2004, most of them were dissatisfied
of
Change preposition
with
show examples
this
condition. Another downside of
this
can be confusion. The reason for
this
is the lack of general information, which in higher stages would be a great problem. In conclusion, there are both positives and negatives of doing
this
in the starting years of
school
. Personally, I believe, the beneficial points outweigh any drawbacks.
Submitted by Ah.mahdavi1365 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Task Achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea that is elaborated on and supported with specific examples. Avoid making general statements without backing them up.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on the logical flow of the essay. Make sure the transition between ideas and paragraphs is smooth and that there is a clear progression from one point to the next.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your introduction and conclusion are both clear and adequately bookend your essay. The introduction should outline the points you will discuss, while the conclusion should summarize them without presenting new information.
Task Achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, when mentioning the teenagers who immigrate to Canada, include specific data or anecdotes to make your point stronger.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
  • proficiency levels
  • competitive job market
  • foundational skills
  • qualified teachers
  • recreational activities
What to do next:
Look at other essays: