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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The line graph provided shows the
population
 change in the urban areas of four different countries, namely
Phillippines
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the Phillippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand, and
Indonesia
 in five decades between 1970 and 2020, with forecasts for
next
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the next
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 two decades ( 2030 and 2040).
Overall
,
it is clear that
city
 dwellers in all four
countires
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countries
counties
has
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 increased with striking similarities throughout the given period.
This
 growth will
also
 continue by 2040. In Malaysia and
Phillippines
 approximately 30% of people used to live in cities in 1970,
while
urban
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the urban
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population
 in Thailand and
Indonesia
 was just under 20% and over 10%, respectively. By 1990
city
 dwellers of all these countries witnessed gradual rises, meanwhile percentage
people
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of people
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 living in the
city
 in
Phillippines
 reached
to
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apply
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a peak of just under 50%. After 1990, the Malaysian
population
 rose dramatically to 70
percent
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per cent
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2020
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in 2020
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,
likewise
 figures for
Indonesia
 climbed to about 50
percent
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per cent
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in 2020. In the predictions for 2030 and 2040
alii
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all
 countries will face growth in
city
population
. Unlike Malaysia with the most urban inhabitants, Thailand will have the least of those. between 50 and 60 percent of people in
Phillippines
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the Phillippines
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 and
Indonesia
 will be
iliving
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living
 in the cities by 2040.
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