Some people think that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes because of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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pollution has become an increasingly common problem around the globe. The majority of the
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hold a view that the authorities should impose heavy
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and regulations to control the
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that
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make every day because
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causes distractions to
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. The following essay will discuss the positives and negatives regarding
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on
noise
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. The main advantage of having a strict law on
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will allow
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to have peaceful sleep at night because too much disturbance to a human's sleep will bring consequences to life
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as health issues.
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, sleep is essential for
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health of an individual to function their brain normally. As an example, in India, there is a restriction regulated by the government that after 11 pm on weekdays no loud
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is played and if it is violated hefty fines will be given to
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.
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, another plus point is that
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are able to concentrate more on work without being distracted by external sounds. For
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, students who are studying and reading for exams
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do not get affected and can concentrate on that
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office workers concentrate on their work. There are disadvantages to imposing
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on sounds because if authorities provide regulations to loud
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and
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there will be a downfall in certain industries
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, they need loud
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to work. As an example, in the
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industry, to publish a song or make one studio one should use different types of
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to test.
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,
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have the freedom to do whatever they prefer in the country, if
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and regulations are imposed, individuals will start using headphones to listen to
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and
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will bring serious negative effects to health
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hearing issues.
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,
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have no freedom and they want to enjoy and
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entertain
themselves. Another fact is that
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celebrate their birthday parties and wedding functions so they want to celebrate their occasion.
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,
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strict
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impose
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by the government are ignored by folks. In conclusion, few individuals have
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opinion that strict norms must be applied to control
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noise
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pollution in order to reduce the disturbance it causes. I believe that the advantages of
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its disadvantages. For that
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the government must take necessary action and restrict
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from making
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.
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, it
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everyone's moral duty to create
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a peaceful
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environment for
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society.
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