The chart below shows the unemployment rate and the number of people leaving Ireland from 1988 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the unemployment rate and the number of people leaving Ireland from 1988 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart illustrates the proportion of unemployed
people
,
as well as
the
number
of emigrants from
this
country from 1998 to 2008.
Overall
, there were downward trends in the level of unemployment in the
period
,
while
the figure for
people
leaving Ireland experienced a
little
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increase compared to the first year of the
period
.
To begin
with, the proportion of those who were unemployed witnessed a sharp decrease from 1998 to 2002. In detail, there were under 17% of unemployed individuals in the year 1998,
then
significantly dropped to over 12%.
However
,
this
rate quickly soared to nearly the same level of 1998, before declining to under 6%. A similar tendency could be seen in the
number
of Ireland’s emigrants.
While
the
number
showed a significant increase from around 30,000
people
to 60,000
people
in the first 2 years of the
period
, the
number
of
people
choosing to leave Ireland was 3 times lower than that in the previous year. Looking at the rest, the
period
from 2000 to 2008, these lines experienced upward trends.
Firstly
, Ireland’s rate of unemployment slightly went up and finished at the rate of roughly 10%.
Moreover
, individuals leaving the island nation slowly was broadly stable at around 20,000
people
before a sharp uptick over the final four years at the level of up to 40,000
people
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, number, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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