It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn about this distinction To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
It is essential for
children
to learn about right and wrong things. Because at an early age, they do not have experience
to differentiate it. So it is necessary to teach the distinction by using punishments. Change the article
the experience
This
essay agree
with Change the verb form
agrees
this
statement because,
Remove the comma
apply
children
lack
decision making
ability and hormonal imbalance.
Add a hyphen
decision-making
Children
are poor at decision making
because of their inexperience and Add a hyphen
decision-making
lack
of knowledge about decide
whether it is right or wrong. Change the verb form
deciding
However
, parents
and teachers play an important role as a guide to help the children
to
understand the difference by using some sort of punishment. Verb problem
apply
For example
, nowadays children
lacks
focus on Change the verb form
lack
studies
because of distractions around them like Correct pronoun usage
their studies
videogames
and mobile devices. Correct your spelling
video games
They
addicted to Add a verb
They are
They were
this
platform because of their poor decisions to focus on activities which does not provide any kind to
value.
Change preposition
of
Furthermore
, in earlier childhood days they go through lot
of hormonal changes. Change the article
a lot
This
impact
the child's ability to differentiate things so it is essential to communicate and teach them good habits by using sort of punishment. Correct subject-verb agreement
impacts
For instance
, countries like Ireland lack
restrictions for children
to use drugs, Change preposition
At in
in
early age they do not know about drugs and Correct your spelling
an
its
impact at all so, Correct pronoun usage
their
parents
should punish their children
to get out of bad behaviour.
Moreover
, inorder
to teach and guide Correct your spelling
in order
children
about good behaviour. Parents
should use some punishment to teach it by restricting the use of thier
Correct your spelling
their
children
mobile devices. Change noun form
children's
Likewise
, teachers should punish them to teach
good behaviour by Change preposition
for teaching
suspend
and Wrong verb form
suspending
dismiss
from schools.
In conclusion, Replace the word
dismissing them
children
lack
ability
to differentiate right and wrong things and their hormonal changes so I agree that it is necessary for teachers and Change the article
the ability
parents
to teach them good habits by using sort of punishments.Submitted by insighttribez on
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