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The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012.

The charts give information about employment in the UK in 1998 and 2012.
The pie graphs below
shows
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 data about
worker
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workers
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 in
United
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 Kingdom
1998
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 and 2012.
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, in 1998 over
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half of the percentage was for men take place on full-time jobs ,
while
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 males in part-time jobs with
small
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 number,and women in full and part times jobs with nearly over quarter or
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 down to
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each
 of them . in 2012 , get just ting ard small Changes and the most
significat
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significant
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 of female employmat in full-time. In 1998, men
become
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at
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the
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first place with 53% in
full time
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full-time
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positians
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positions
,
while
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not
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full time
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 percentage only 6% which it's
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 number in the graphs.
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 to females with part-time work by over than quarter with small percentage,
also
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second
seconed
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second
 type of positions have only 4,472
ladys
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ladies
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 men in the top but with
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%
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drop
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percenterge
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percentage
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 full-time ones as well.
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ladies
 count in full-time increased
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significantly
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%
rising
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worker
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workers
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part- time
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part-time
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 positions.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment rates
  • Workforce
  • Full-time employment
  • Part-time employment
  • Economic sectors
  • Technological advancements
  • Demographics
  • Unemployment
  • Labor market
  • Job creation
  • Economic growth
  • Gender disparity
  • Age cohort
  • Manufacturing sector
  • Service industry
  • Economic downturn
  • Government initiatives
  • Employment trends
  • Financial crisis
  • Economic policy
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