Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Globally, not all
countries
stands
on the same stage financially. Some Change the verb form
stand
countries
has
more financial power than other Change the verb form
have
countries
. Nations
having more wealth tend to help poor nations
in the form of aids
, grants, loans and Fix the agreement mistake
aid
helps
. Correct subject-verb agreement
help
These
Fix the agreement mistake
This aid
aids
for poor countries
made to make them independent and financially better.
The effects of poverty in poor countries
are very dangerous like high influence rate, jobs
layout, recession , shortage of food and resources. wealthy Change the noun form
job
nations
provide financial aids
to needy Fix the agreement mistake
aid
nations
to improve their financial condition, On the
contrary
it seems several times in history despite Add the comma(s)
contrary,
of
financial support, These regions are enable to growChange preposition
apply
up
. It meansChange preposition
apply
, The
support they require is not only for money but they should be taught how to use that aid for Correct your spelling
that the
nation
growth. Let's consider one instance, Pakistan is Replace the word
national
very
poor Add an article
a very
nation
. The nation
's GDP is very low that effects can be seen through their
influence rate, which is more than 200%. Pakistan Correct pronoun usage
its
is
suffering from poverty of Wrong verb form
has been
last
more than 2 decades, and Always ask
Correct subject-verb agreement
asks
financial
aid from the Change preposition
for financial
USA
government. It Correct your spelling
US
had
been seenWrong verb form
has
,
Correct word choice
that, USA
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
also
helped so many time
Pakistan through financial Fix the agreement mistake
times
aids
but the poverty of Fix the agreement mistake
aid
country
Correct article usage
the country
is seemed
to be increasing. So, In Change to the active voice
seems
has seemed
this
way
I disagree with the statement, "Rich country giving financial help to poor Add a comma
way,
countries
for growth
of that country".
In conclusion, I think apart from the money Correct article usage
the growth
help
or aid to the poor Fix the infinitive
to help
countries
, Rich countries
should provide them resources
and supplies, and teach them how to manage Change preposition
with resources
nation's
resources for future growth and development.Correct pronoun usage
their nation's
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task achievement
Ensure that the essay directly addresses the question of whether providing non-financial aid is more beneficial than financial aid, and to what extent you agree or disagree with this. Providing clear examples and explanations to support your position will make your argument more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Work on paragraph structuring to have a clear introduction, a body with distinct and well-developed ideas, and a conclusion that effectively summarises your perspective. Consider using more cohesive devices (e.g., linking words, topic sentences) to connect your ideas more clearly and improve readability.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite