Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Globally, not all

countries

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stands

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on the same stage financially. Some

countries

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has

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more financial power than other

countries

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Nations

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having more wealth tend to help poor

nations

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in the form of

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aids

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aid

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, grants, loans and

helps

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help

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These

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aids

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for poor

countries

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made to make them independent and financially better. The effects of poverty in poor

countries

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are very dangerous like high influence rate,

jobs

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layout, recession , shortage of food and resources. wealthy

nations

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provide financial

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aids

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aid

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to needy

nations

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to improve their financial condition,

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contrary

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it seems several times in history despite

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financial support, These regions are enable to grow

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. It means

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that the

support they require is not only for money but they should be taught how to use that aid for

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nation

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growth. Let's consider one instance, Pakistan is

very

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poor

nation

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. The

nation

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's GDP is very low that effects can be seen through

their

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influence rate, which is more than 200%. Pakistan

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suffering from poverty of

last

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more than 2 decades, and Always

ask

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financial

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aid from the

USA

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government. It

had

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been seen

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that, USA

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USA

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also

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helped so many

time

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Pakistan through financial

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aids

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but the poverty of

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is seemed

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to be increasing. So, In

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way

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I disagree with the statement, "Rich country giving financial help to poor

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for

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of that country". In conclusion, I think apart from the money

help

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or aid to the poor

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, Rich

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should provide them

resources

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with resources

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and supplies, and teach them how to manage

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nation's

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resources for future growth and development.

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task achievement

Ensure that the essay directly addresses the question of whether providing non-financial aid is more beneficial than financial aid, and to what extent you agree or disagree with this. Providing clear examples and explanations to support your position will make your argument more persuasive.

coherence cohesion

Work on paragraph structuring to have a clear introduction, a body with distinct and well-developed ideas, and a conclusion that effectively summarises your perspective. Consider using more cohesive devices (e.g., linking words, topic sentences) to connect your ideas more clearly and improve readability.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

261 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

poverty alleviation
economic inequality
developing nations
foreign aid
sustainable growth
technical assistance
expertise
infrastructure
education
fair trade
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sustainable development
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