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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012.

The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012.
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The given table provides some information on the
amount
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 of electricity generated by five
sources
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 including Geothermal,
Wind
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, Solar, Hydraulic and
Bio-mass
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 across the globe over a four-year
period
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. Looking at the
overall
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 perspective, it is apparent that the Hydraulic source generated the highest
amount
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 of energy among the other
sources
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, which accounted for more than 80% of the total energy production.
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, all
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 witnessed an upward trend throughout the given
period
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. In terms of evaluation of
sources
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, the electricity produced by the Hydraulic method
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 was thirteen times that
of
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generated by
Bio-mass
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 and
Wind
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sources
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.
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, Hydraulic
sources
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 started at 3329
TWh
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 in 2009
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after which
this
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amount
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 went up to 3514 and 3530 in 2010 and 2011, respectively.
At the end
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 of the studied
period
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,
this
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amount
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 peaked at 3663.
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 both
Bio-mass
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 and
Wind
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 started the production of energy at a similar value at 246 and 276, the
wind
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 was a more fast-growing source so
this
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 source generated more than 535
TWH
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 in 2012 as opposed to the
Bio-mass
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 at 326
TWh
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. Other
sources
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,
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 as Geothermal and Solar, were ranked
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fourth and fifth. The generated
amount
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 of electricity by Geothermal had no significant change over the
period
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, whilst the other one started at 21
TWh
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 and produced 104
TWh
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 in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, sources, wind, bio-mass, period, twh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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