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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.
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The given maps illustrate how an industrial zone named Norbiton situated to the south of
river
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the river
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 is going to be transformed into a residential area.
Overall
, the proposed plan for prospective changes considers not only the
phase out
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 of
factory's
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the factory's
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 properties
,
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apply
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 but
also
 the construction of housing and new residential facilities.
Moreover
, some linking roads are going to be built for better accessibility of residents to the facilities. In terms of
development
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the development
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 of housing and access roads, it is apparent that a north road connecting the main roundabout to the north and a bridge which crosses the river and branches to
west
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the west
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 and east sides are taken into account.
Also
, another street heading to
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the north
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north west
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north-west
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 is considered, too.
Moreover
, some residential houses are going to be located to the north of
river
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the river
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 and
new
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the new
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northen
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northern
 road
as well as
 around the main roundabout. In order to be equipped, some shops and medical
center
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centers
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 are
gioing
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going
 to be built in the
sout
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south
 west and
south east
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southeast
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 of the main square and
also
 just above of newly built small square located to the south border of the map.
Besides
, a playground and
schoold
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school
schools
 are added to the east side of the main square.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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