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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.

The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
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The three pie charts
illustrates
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 six different types of annual spending by local authorities in Someland between 1980, 1990 and 2000.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of expenditure in the Higher
Education
 sector was larger than in other sectors.
By contrast
, the figure
of
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 spending money on other sectors is the smallest. In 1980,
expedenture
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expenditure
 in
higher
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education
 sector was the highest about 35%. It is followed by
K-12
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the K-12
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education
 sector
exactly
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 a quarter, with 25% of annual spending. A small minority for transportation with 16% and human and health resources was 14%. The figures
environmental
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 services and
other
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others
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 is the smallest with 4% and 6%. Meanwhile, we can see that higher
education
 showed
rise
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about
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 5% from 35% to 40%
also
 environmental services increased from 4% to 9%. Expenditure by transportation showed an increase
growth
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 with 6% from 16% to 22%.
By contrast
, the percentage for K-12
education
, health and human resources and
other
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others
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 showed a downward
trends
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trend
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 in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocation of budget
  • percentage distribution
  • annual spending
  • local authorities
  • sectors
  • increased funding
  • decreased funding
  • trends
  • socio-economic conditions
  • policies
  • expenditure
  • public services
  • financial priorities
  • budgetary adjustments
  • fiscal policies
  • discretionary spending
  • mandatory spending
  • inflation-adjusted
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