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Band 5

Large number of subject with large number of knowledge or smaller number of subjects with great detail cover. provide 2 views and your own opinion.

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It
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 is still
undeniable
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an undeniable
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to
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debate in society
whether
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about whether
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students
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 need to learn more
things
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 to gain more knowledge or stick with fewer
subjects
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 to get more knowledge on certain parts.
This
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 essay will elaborate
both
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on both
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 motions
as well as
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 give related illustrations before I state my view.
To begin
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 with, learners who experienced more fields in several areas tend to have open minds
where
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when
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 they get exposed
by
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to
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 all
those
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that
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 knowledge.
This
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 phenomenon is
benefecial
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beneficial
 for many learners as it will push them to be explorers and enrich their studying journey.
For instance
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, communication science
major
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majors
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 in many universities allow the
students
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 to learn not only about human interaction and its behaviour, but
also
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 give them materials about law, psychology, and media which can support their main subject.
Hence
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, I see that
larger
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a larger
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 aspect of materials
are
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is
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 needed to acknowledge the
students
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 in order to motivate them
on trying
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to try
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 new
things
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 and push them out
from
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of
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 their comfort zones.
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, many
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apply
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of
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apply
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individuals
likely
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are likely
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 to choose
smaller
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the smaller
a smaller
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fields
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field
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fields
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 of
subjects
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 so they can focus on what they prioritize the most.
This
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 is because
majority
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the majority
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 of people find that it is better to be
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skilful
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 in specific aspects, compared with learning
on
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apply
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many
things
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 that mostly only make them have decent skills in each stuff.
For example
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, engineering
students
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 are highly educated in
machine
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machines
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as well as
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 electricity as those two topics are the only
things
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 that are relevant for their study, in contradictory with theatre kids
where
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who
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they
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apply
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need to be exposed
in
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to
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 several
subjects
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 that are related
with
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to
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 the characters they play in. I believe that to dive in more into specific
subjects
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 can
be
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make it
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 easier to improve their understanding and better
on
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apply
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practical experience which will be great for their future careers.
To sum up
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, neither of the motions
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each
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the
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others
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other
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. It
is
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all depends on
students
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' choices on deciding to have
wider
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a wider
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 understanding by learning the materials from many perspectives or learning the exact
subjects
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 so they can be more expert
on
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in
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that
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those
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 areas.

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task achievement
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea, which is then developed with specific examples or explanations.
coherence cohesion
Work on structuring paragraphs effectively, with clear topic sentences and supporting sentences that develop the main point.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of cohesive devices to improve the flow of the essay. This includes linking phrases, synonyms, and reference words.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific and relevant examples to support your points, rather than hypothetical or general statements.
task achievement
Balance your essay by spending equal time on each viewpoint and your own opinion to ensure a fully developed response.
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