The graph below show the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below show the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph shows different kinds of fish and meat (chicken, beef, lamb) consumption from 1979 to 2004. In 1979 less than 150
grams
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of chicken was consumed,
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however
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however,
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this
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number started to rise and reached around 250
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in 2004. Even though the increase was not smooth, the data ultimately depicts a surge.
In contrast
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, more beef was consumed in 1979, than in 2004: the numbers
decrease
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decreased
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dramatically from more than 200 to approximately 100
grams
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. The level of lamb consumption shows a similarity to chicken in 1979,
however
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just
as
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like
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beef, it started to level off until 2004 to just above 50
grams
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.
On the other hand
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, fish seems to have been consumed rather consistently over the years, only dropping slightly below 50
grams
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in 2004. To summarize, the three types of
meet
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meeting
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have been drastically fluctuating respectively from 1979 to 2004. Contrarily, fish consumption was steady and firm.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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