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The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.

The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.
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The line graph illustrates the global needs of different types of textiles (
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polyster
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polyester
, cotton, cellulosic, and wool) from 1980 to 2015. Units are measured in
million
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tons
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.
Overall
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, the highest demand
of
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for
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 the textile is
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polyster
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polyester
, and it showed a dramatic
increase
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 over the period given,
whereas
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 wool is the least needed textile over the period given. With regards to the
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polyster
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polyester
, it started at about 5
million
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tons
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 in the first
year
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 and had a slight
increase
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 to the
year
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of
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2000. In the
year
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 2000 onwards, the needs of
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polyster
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polymers
 were expanded to nearly 70
million
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tons
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 in the
last
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year
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.
However
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, wool, which had the least demand, started at around 2
million
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tons
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,
had
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and had
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 a
little
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small
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increase
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 to nearly 5
million
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tons
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.
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, cellulosic
has shown
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showed
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 a slight decrease from the first
year
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 to 1998,
however
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, it showed a slight
increase
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 after the
year
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of
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1998 and reached nearly 10
million
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tons
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 in the
last
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year
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.
Besides
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, cotton, which started at around 12
million
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tons
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, had slowly
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increase
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increased
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 to reach about 32
million
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tons
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 in the
last
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year
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words polyster, million, tons, increase, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global demand
  • Textile industry
  • Natural fibers
  • Synthetic fibers
  • Manufacturing advancements
  • Fashion trends
  • Consumer preferences
  • Economic factors
  • Purchasing power
  • Eco-friendly materials
  • Market share
  • Production capacity
  • Polyester
  • Cotton
  • Wool
  • Nylon
  • Demand curve
  • Sustainability
  • Textile innovation
  • Fluctuations
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