The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.

The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.
The line graph illustrates the global needs of different types of textiles (
polyster
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polyester
, cotton, cellulosic, and wool) from 1980 to 2015. Units are measured in
million
tons
.
Overall
, the highest demand
of
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for
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the textile is
polyster
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polyester
, and it showed a dramatic
increase
over the period given,
whereas
wool is the least needed textile over the period given. With regards to the
polyster
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polyester
, it started at about 5
million
tons
in the first
year
and had a slight
increase
to the
year
of
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2000. In the
year
2000 onwards, the needs of
polyster
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polymers
were expanded to nearly 70
million
tons
in the
last
year
.
However
, wool, which had the least demand, started at around 2
million
tons
,
had
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and had
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a
little
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small
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increase
to nearly 5
million
tons
.
On the other hand
, cellulosic
has shown
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showed
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a slight decrease from the first
year
to 1998,
however
, it showed a slight
increase
after the
year
of
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1998 and reached nearly 10
million
tons
in the
last
year
.
Besides
, cotton, which started at around 12
million
tons
, had slowly
increase
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increased
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to reach about 32
million
tons
in the
last
year
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global demand
  • Textile industry
  • Natural fibers
  • Synthetic fibers
  • Manufacturing advancements
  • Fashion trends
  • Consumer preferences
  • Economic factors
  • Purchasing power
  • Eco-friendly materials
  • Market share
  • Production capacity
  • Polyester
  • Cotton
  • Wool
  • Nylon
  • Demand curve
  • Sustainability
  • Textile innovation
  • Fluctuations
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