The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small twon called Islip is it is now, and plans for its development.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map compares the plans of one centre of the town of Islip
in
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a
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the
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current moment and the plan with proposed changes for
future
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the future
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.
Overall
, the
area
is planning to be more developed including
roads
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construction and the expansion of house facilities.
Additionally
, because of the building of new facilities, the
country side
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is going to be removed.
To begin
, in the centre now, a number of shops are placed along the main road,
whereas
in future, the shops on the north side will be replaced by a bus station, shopping centre and a car park.
Additionally
, a new housing
area
will be built from the east of the parking, having access to a pathway for
pedastrians
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pedestrians
.
Furthermore
, as a road is planned to surround the main facilities,
countryside
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the countryside
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, on the
northen
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northern
north
side, will be erased. Even though
,
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a school and accommodation
area
is considered to
keep
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unchanged, the housing
area
, which is next to a park will be divided into two areas.
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