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The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.

The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.
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The graph illustrates
about
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the global
demand
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on
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for
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polyester
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,
cotton
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,
cellulosic
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, and
wool
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 in 1980, 1985, 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, and 2015.
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polyester
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 was the only textile
types
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 that always rose
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every year. Meanwhile,
cellulosic
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demand
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decrease
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 from 1980 to 2000. The highest
demand
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cotton
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wool
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happened
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 number above 30 for
cotton
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, and in early 2000, with
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 number above 0 for
wool
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. In 2020, the
demand
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polyester
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was
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rapid increase
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 until 2015,
there
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 were 60
polyester
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 that produced
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that year.
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, the lowest production of
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happened
 in 1980. Different from
polyester
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,
in
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every year the
demand
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cotton
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was
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rapid
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 changes. The highest
demand
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cotton
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was
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happened
 in 2015.
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, the
demand
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cellulosic
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 and
wool
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always
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 stagnant from 1980 to middle 1995. In 2000, the
demand
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cellulosic
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 was
increase
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 with the number of it above 0.
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very
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 different condition
with
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 the
demand
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wool
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 because in 2000 the
demand
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wool
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 and always standability until 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words demand, polyester, cotton, cellulosic, wool with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global demand
  • Textile industry
  • Natural fibers
  • Synthetic fibers
  • Manufacturing advancements
  • Fashion trends
  • Consumer preferences
  • Economic factors
  • Purchasing power
  • Eco-friendly materials
  • Market share
  • Production capacity
  • Polyester
  • Cotton
  • Wool
  • Nylon
  • Demand curve
  • Sustainability
  • Textile innovation
  • Fluctuations
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