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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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The question of whether learning
English
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 or learning local
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languages
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 is always a controversial issue in our contemporary society.
This
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 essay will discuss whether it is imperative for
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 to learn
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 and whether we should preserve our local
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.
Firstly
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, I strongly believe that it is
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significant for
everyone
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 to learn
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. The reason is
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widely used and recognised internationally. Knowing
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 simply means that one obtains the key to be able to communicate with the rest of the world. It is especially important now with globalisation, where every part of the world can easily connect with each other. A substantial number of multinational companies are set up following globalisation. More often than not, the
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 first requirement when they hire
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 is the ability to communicate in
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.
Therefore
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, learning
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 will be a tremendous help to secure a decent job. Having said that, it is
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 equally important to preserve our local
languages
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. Local
language
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 is an identity of a nation, it represents a nation's history and culture. Without local
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, a nation and its people lose their uniqueness and
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, the world will
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lack
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diversity. There are several ways to preserve local
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 by the society.
For instance
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, the government can make learning
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 and
local
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language
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 compulsory. Malaysia's
goverment
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government
 implemented
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 policies and turned out to be a great success.
On the other hand
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, parents can
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 train their children since young to speak
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language
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 at home.
This
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 will help the children to spark interest in
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 and help them to practice frequently at home. In conclusion, I am of the view that learning
English
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 is important for
everyone
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, especially with globalisation.
Nevertheless
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, it is
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 equally important to preserve our local
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, which are the identities
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 different nations. Preserving local
languages
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 can be done through
everyone
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's effort.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear and consistent flow. Start with an introduction where you paraphrase the question and state your thesis. Then, present each main point in separate paragraphs with clear topic sentences, and provide support with examples or explanations. In the conclusion, restate your thesis and summarize your main points.
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Work on developing more relevant, detailed examples to support your arguments. The examples given (e.g., multinational companies requiring English, Malaysia's language policy) are on track but require further elaboration. Use specific cases or data where possible to strengthen your points.
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Remember to address all parts of the task. You've discussed the importance of learning English and preserving local languages, but consider also exploring any potential conflicts or challenges that arise between these goals, as this could lead to a more nuanced approach and a higher score for task response.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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