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The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph illustrates the data on the average number of tourists who visited a museum in summer and
winter
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 in the year 2003.
Overall
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, there are major differences in warm weather and wintertime guest appearance in the museum, At a glance majority of visitors were in summer,
while
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 the minority were in
winter
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.
To begin
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 with, the number of travellers starts both in summer and
winter
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 from zero,
then
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 in warm weather and cold season, sightseers climbed gradually to 800 and 550
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1000 times respectively.
Then
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 visitors in
winter
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 are approx stabilized till 1150 afterwards graph dropped again to zero at time 1450 and its remain continue till 1800.
On the other hand
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, the hot weather line is increased sharply for travellers and its makes hike at 1150
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after
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this
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 line is used to slumped and starts declined, after at time 1550 rush is dropped and at 1800 visitors have become nill.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words winter with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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