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IELTS general writing task 1 sample: You have won a holiday to Hawaii with one extra ticket. Write a letter to someone to invite them along with you. In the letter: – Explain what has happened and that you would like them to come – Give details of when the trip will take place – Inform the person of the things they will need for the trip

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Dear Robert, I hope
this
 letter finds you. It's been a long time since we've met
last
 time. I have a surprise for you that
invite
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 you to Hawaii with my free ticket which I won recently for 2 people. I went to The Star yesterday and there was a
game
 that hit the balloons with a toy gun. When the
game
 started I wasn't applied for
game
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the game
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 but,
due to
lack
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a lack
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 of people in the
game
, they started the
game
 later. You already know that I'm very good
on
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at
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 aiming with
gun
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a gun
the gun
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. I have won the tickets and would like to invite you with your wife for a holiday. The trip will take
the
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place next summer.
Also
, it's
good
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a good
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 time for you to come
along with
 me next summer. By the way, don't worry about going to Hawaii since ways
plane
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 for all of us included. By the way, just let your wife know about that trip. Along the trip, you'll need your personal care
such
 as sunglasses, sunscreen, and protective hats. You won't want to get affected
from
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 the strong sun when you enjoy sunbathing.
Next,
bring your passports with you. I look forward to hearing from you. Please let me know once you get my letter. Warm Regards, Atilla
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coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphing to organize the letter logic.
coherence cohesion
Start with an appropriate greeting and end with a proper closing.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to maintain clarity.
task achievement
Address all tasks of the question explicitly to achieve a higher score in task response.
task achievement
Adopt a consistent and fitting tone throughout the letter; informal for friends or formal when appropriate to the recipient.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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