The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.

The chart shows the results of surveys in one African country asking teenagers the main reasons for using their phones between 2016 and 2019.
the pie chart shows the
proportion
of
main
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the main
show examples
reasons
phone
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phones
show examples
are used by teenagers in
a
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an
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African state,
started
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starting
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from 2016 to 2019.
overall
, social networks
was
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were
show examples
the biggest
proportion
year by year, followed by email,
digital
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and digital
show examples
camera
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cameras
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, and the least was
phone
calls
as
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apply
show examples
the smallest
proportion
. In 2016, social networks
was
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were
show examples
in
a
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apply
show examples
half of the total
proportion
,
whle
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while
in 2017 decreased to 48%.
in
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In
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2018
it
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they
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increase
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increased
show examples
as much as 3% and in the
last
year it
becomes
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became
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the
higest
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highest
which had 56%. There was
decreasing
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a decreasing
show examples
proportion
of youth
used
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who used
show examples
their
phone
for email.
in
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From
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2016 to 2017
decrease
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decreased
show examples
a
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by a
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percent and it was
same
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the same
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as in 2018 to 2019.
Digital
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The digital
A digital
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camera was used 15% in 2016 and it same as
2107
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in 2107
show examples
.
while
2018 and 2019 each are 18% and 20%.
Phone
calls
was
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were
show examples
only 10% in 2016. it
increasd
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increased
in 2017 became 13%, but decreased as much as 11% in 2018, and it became smaller in 2019 which had 5% only.
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