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Goveenment should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#goveenment #money #railways #roads
Money should
spend
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 on railways as
compare
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compared
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 to
roads
 by
authority
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the authority
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. I largely agree or disagree both with the provided assertation and will highlight some
lohical
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logical
local
 reasons in the upcoming composition. Examining one facet of the issue,railways are the public transport which is more affordable
by
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for
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 the poor
peoples
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people
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. Government should expand funds towards
thier maintainance
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their maintenance
 and
tickets
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ticket
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 prices. Administration should look after the food services in
tge
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the
 train,cleanliness must required.
Lets
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Let's
Let us
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 suppose,if a family booked their sears in first class
ciach
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coach
 and there
is
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are
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 very
unhyginenic
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unhygienic
hygienic
 washrooms and seats.
As a result
, they will not invest their time and money in public conveyance. Taking a different
prespective
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perspective
,
roads
are
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also
plays
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play
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 a vital role in our
life
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lives
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. If they will not properly constructed the risk of accidents will be increased. To take a salient example,if
there
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it
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 is
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a pathole
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pathole
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pothole
potholes
 in
roads
 is there
due to
 weather or traffic and is
contructed
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constructed
 by authority on time.
As a result
,it rapidly increases the number of accidents.
By
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 the above discussion it is lucid that,in my
opinion
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opinion,
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mamagement
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management
 should spend money on both
roads
 and railways rather than on one thing.
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introduction
The essay should initiate with a clear introduction of the topic, stating a clear position regarding the agreement or disagreement with the statement.
structure
Use a logical structure by organizing ideas clearly into paragraphs, each with a clear main idea and supporting sentences.
examples
Provide specific, relevant examples to support each point you make, ensuring that you stick to the topic and fully explain how each example supports your argument.
grammar
Work on grammar and punctuation to provide clarity to your arguments. Pay attention to sentence structure and avoid run-on sentences or fragmented ideas.
conclusion
The conclusion should succinctly summarize the main points made in the essay and restate your position, without introducing new ideas.
task response
Ensure your position on the statement is clear throughout the essay and that all points made relate back to your view on the investment in railways versus roads.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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