The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004.

write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.
The line diagram demonstrates the cost of bananas in four different countries namely,
Japan
, France, Germany and
USA
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the USA
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in the year 1996 to 2004.
Overall
, it is evident from the graph that
Japan
had the maximum
sales
of bananas and the USA had the least amount of
sales
. In 1996,
Japan
and France had the highest
sales
of bananas
of
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at
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about 2$ per
kg
,
however
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both these countries had a
fluctuction
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fluctuation
in the
sales
rate
over the years.
Japan
's
sales
rate
declined drastically in 2003 with the figure of 1.5$ per
kg
,
although
this
rate
inclined sharply in 2004 with 2.5 $per
kg
.
On the other hand
, France
sales
remained constant from 2003 to 2004 with 2$ per
kg
.
In contrast
, the USA depicts the
least
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lowest
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sales
rate
in 1996 with a figure of 1$ per
kg
and peaked
to
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at
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1.3$ per
kg
in 1998 and remained stable
throughtout
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throughout
the years until 2004. Germany had a fluctuation trend and
then
inclined to 2$ per
kg
in 2002.
However
, it
further
showed a
declined
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declining
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trend in 2004.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Fluctuate
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stable/Stability
  • Significant
  • Gradual
  • Sharp
  • Slight
  • Peak
  • Plummet
  • Spike
  • Level off
  • Dip
  • Plateau
  • Cost
  • Price
  • Currency
  • Decade
  • Year-on-year
  • Economic factors
  • Consumer demand
  • Inflation
  • Market forces
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