The pie chart below show the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

The pie chart below show the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.
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The figures illustrate the
number
of several reasons that have an
impact
on to decline productivity of agricultural
land
, and the
number
of causes of
land
degradation
in North America,
Europe
, and Oceania in the 1990s.
Overall
, over-grazing, over-cultivation, and deforestation
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are the several main reasons that have an
impact
on the productivity of agricultural
land
.
In addition
, North America,
Europe
, and Oceania are the countries that experiencing
land
degradation
. From the pie chart,
It is clear that
the
number
of over-grazing has a huge
impact
on agricultural
land
productivity,
while
there
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7% other reasons. It can
also
be seen that deforestation is the second factor why agricultural
land
becomes less productive. Meanwhile, the
number
of
land
degradation
that is
caused by over-cultivation is only 28%.
Furthermore
, based on the table, it is obvious that the highest proportion that make
land
degradation
in North America is over-cultivation with the
number
3.3%.
This
is a different situation from
Europe
because the most impactful factor that causes
land
degradation
in
Europe
is deforestation.
On the other hand
, over-grazing has a huge
impact
on
land
degradation
in Oceania.
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