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Modern technology, such as personal computers and the Internet, have made it possible for many people to do their work from home at least part of the time instead of going to an office every day. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of this situation?

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expanses
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companies provide
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opinion
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useful
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coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay is logically organized by using clear paragraphs to separate different ideas or points. Begin with an introduction that presents the topic, followed by body paragraphs that discuss advantages and disadvantages, and end with a conclusive paragraph that summarizes your viewpoint.
coherence cohesion
Make use of a variety of linking words and cohesive devices to connect ideas within and across sentences, such as 'Furthermore', 'However', 'For instance' etc.
task achievement
Address the task fully by providing a balanced view of both the advantages and disadvantages of working from home. Expand your points with specific examples and clear explanations to support your arguments.
task achievement
Work on the clarity of expression by constructing complete sentences with proper grammar, and making sure that ideas and arguments are clearly and comprehensively presented.
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Use relevant and specific examples to support the advantages and disadvantages mentioned. These examples should illustrate the point you are making and help to explain why it is an advantage or disadvantage.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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