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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart provided illustrates the amount of money earned by American households in three different years, namely 2007, 2011, and 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
number
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 of
families
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 who earned $100,000 or more has increased throughout the given period,
while
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 the
number
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 of
families
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 with
lesser
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a lesser
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 amount of
income
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 remained relatively stable. In 2007, those who earned $100,000 or more were twice as many as
americans
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Americans
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 with $75,000 to $99,000
income
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, meanwhile, the
number
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 of households with less than 50,000 dollars
income
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 per year used to be just over 50
millions
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million
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. Despite a slight fall in 2011, the
number
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 of those with the highest
income
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 in the
Us has
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US
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 increased significantly in 2015 and reached a peak of just under 35 million
families
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. American
families
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 whose
income
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 was between $50,000 and $74,000 have never changed in
number
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 from 2007 to 2015 and remained approximately 20 million individuals.
This
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 is
also
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 true for those with $75,000-$99,000
income
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 per year, which remained at relatively
same
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number
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 at the corresponding time.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of Americans with under 50,000 yearly
income
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 witnessed some slight fluctuations in
that
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those
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 years.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, families, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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