It is often said that it is not necessary to have a tertiary education to become a successful businessman. To what extent to you agree or disagree with this statement?
Nowadays, there are opinions and sayings among a number of
people
that it is complex to become a successful entrepreneur without graduating a
tertiary Change preposition
from a
education
. It is possible to be good
Add an article
a good
business
owner without higher education
.
One of the factors in becoming a powerful top business
holder is study
at Wrong verb form
studying
university
or learning from experts in the field. At the
Change preposition
The
university
have
masters Wrong verb form
having
of
Change preposition
in
this
field teach and university
Correct article usage
a university
education
is planned before to start
Change the verb form
starting
that
will Correct pronoun usage
which
be provides
orderly learning and help to study Change the verb form
provide
business’s
secrets step by step Change noun form
business
to
Change preposition
for
the
future Correct article usage
apply
business
owners. For instance
, education
after high school have
Change the verb form
has
learned
Verb problem
taught
skills
likeCorrect pronoun usage
me skills
,
management, Remove the comma
apply
marketing
. That's why, many Correct word choice
and marketing
people
believe got degree
Correct article usage
a degree
instead
of have
not Wrong verb form
having
degree
. And another
option of study at Correct word choice
Another
university
is working or access to communication with team
. Correct article usage
a team
That is
chance
to Correct article usage
a chance
learning
network skills with others.
Wrong verb form
learn
On the other hand
, a plethora of people
group believe
that it is achievable to develop their own brands without obtaining a higher Change the verb form
believes
education
degree
. They are saying that not necessarily not
get a Rephrase
apply
degree
to start business
, because Add an article
a business
this
field focuses more on practice. One of the best options to learn business
is to be expert's
apprenticeship. Correct article usage
an expert's
Furthermore
, with support
of technology, being successful in Correct article usage
the support
business
career is easier than Add an article
a business
previous
years. To exemplify, twenty years ago, Change preposition
in previous
people
could make an advertisement only on TV or radio but now social media gives them a great opportunity to flourish on
their personal area. Change preposition
in
Therefore
, currently
both of the two types of businessmen are equal.
In a nutshell, higher Add a comma
currently,
education
can definitely teach some advantage
of Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
business
strategies for someone, but this
never become
the only pathway to success. Learning new skills is important to continue as a successful Change the verb form
becomes
entrepreneurship
.Replace the word
entrepreneur
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