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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparasions where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparasions where relevant.
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The two diagrams give information about the floor plan of the Central
Capitalize word
Library
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library
Use synonyms
 20 years ago and the present day.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there are still 4 divided rooms,
while
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 some rooms have changed,
however
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, others have been transformed.
To begin
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in
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apply
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20 years ago people would face the reading
zone
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 on the west of the
library
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, it has been replaced
to
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with
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computer
Correct article usage
a computer
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zone
Use synonyms
 nowadays,
while
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 the
gamezone
Correct your spelling
GameZone
Gamezone
 on the north-west
side
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 expanded and today is used
like
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as
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Correct article usage
a childrens
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childrens
Correct your spelling
children
children's
 room.
Furthermore
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 , the children's room
in
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on
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 the north-east
side
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 of the
library
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 was replaced with a meeting room.
In
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On
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 the
south -east
Add a hyphen
south-east
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side
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 of the
library
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 information desk moved to the east middle
side
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,
although
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 nowadays people can go to the cafe in
this
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 area. 20 years ago in the middle of the hall, the
library
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 owned 2 tables with chairs, which were moved in the present.
Adult
Correct article usage
The adult
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 fiction
zone
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 in the west middle
side
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 moved to the
all
Correct determiner usage
apply
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reverence book
zone
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in
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apply
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nowadays.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, zone, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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