Nowadays, people are not as fit and active as they used to be in the past which creates health issues in the long-run. Why do you think this is? What measures can be taken to solve this problem?

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ancient times, it is believed that health is wealth.

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citizens

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of today are not

healthy

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as they were in the past. They

are having

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major diseases. The main cause is innovation which

made

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people

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lazy. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will elaborate on these

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followed by solutions. Innovation has given many updated devices to humans.

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as cars, bikes, and buses.

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is often seen

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travelling modern mode of transportation

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, in

past

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they

use

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cycle

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cycles

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prefer

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preferred

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to walk long miles to move from one place to the other. These days

people

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went

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to gyms for

exercises

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exercise

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but before

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their regular routine was like exercise.

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the nations

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nations

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main focus was to eat healthy

food

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such

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as organic vegetables, fruits, and ghee.

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, now

youngs

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young

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eat fast

food

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more. So all these habits

leads

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lead

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to issues

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as obesity, heart disease, and attacks. How to solve

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dilemma? The answer

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this

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question is clear both the

people

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and the government can take initiatives.

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government

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the government

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can create

awarness

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awareness

by making a day special for exercise day like India did

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apply

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Yoga

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in july. It will assist

people

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to know the benefits of yoga and they may implement it in their life.

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, high taxes on fast

food

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should be imposed to encourage them toward fruits and vegetables.

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this

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people

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ownself

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can develop a routine,

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and they

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can balance their work and home life. After doing

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, they can manage time for exercise. Eventually,

healthy

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a healthy

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nation is in the hands of both public administration and

residence

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residents

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be conclude

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heath

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health

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is a matter of concern in

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modern era

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the introduction of new diseases in the technology era. But with necessary measures

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as time management and taxes on junk

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may help to control

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some extent.

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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that the ideas are fully developed and expanded upon with relevant details and examples. Provide further explanation and examples to support your statements. Be mindful of run-on sentences and create paragraphs with a clear focus.

task achievement

To enhance task achievement, be sure to address all parts of the prompt. Develop your arguments with a balanced approach and include both causes and solutions to the issue being discussed. Keep the ideas relevant and avoid general statements without specific details or examples.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

312 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

sedentary lifestyle
urbanization
physical activity
transportation modes
desk-bound
fast food
health awareness
public health campaigns
infrastructure
wellness programs
physical education
fitness trackers
active living
motivation for exercise

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*Nowadays, people are not as fit and active as they used to be in the past which creates health issues in the long-run. Why do you think this is? What measures can be taken to solve this problem?*

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