People today often use the internet to learn about the culture of other countries. This means that it is not that important to travel to those countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
modern era, online tool
Fix the agreement mistake
tools
has
become the most important aspect in today's generation for the purpose of learning Correct subject-verb agreement
have
western
culture Capitalize word
Western
instead
of personally visiting there. I am totally disagree
with the above notion and below I will elucidate my opinion with the support of examples.
To commence with, travelling is a good idea to explore the culture and tradition of other countries which is not only helpful in gaining more knowledge but Change the verb form
totally disagree
also
opens the
new opportunities in the form of jobs in the multinational companies. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, employees having multi-cultural
backgrounds can easily communicate with each Correct your spelling
multicultural
others
. Change to a singular noun
other
Moreover
, there is a chance of learning foreign
language which Add an article
a foreign
further
beneficial in Add a missing verb
is further
broaden
the horizon of the individual Change the form of the verb
broadening
helps
to become Correct word choice
and helps
a
multilingual in future.
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apply
Furthermore
, travellers have the advantage of getting compensation from the government of that country who
invites the tourists to explore their nation for the sake of increasing income level for them. To illustrate more, Correct pronoun usage
which
bangkok
provides Change the capitalization
Bangkok
the
free visas to vacationers to earn more income.
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apply
On the other hand
, it is true that internet
is the best source of learning Correct article usage
the internet
lifestyle
of other countries without any physical movement, Add an article
the lifestyle
however
there is a chance of getting fictitious data uploaded by Add a comma
however,
the
hackers.
In conclusion, one can easily access Correct article usage
apply
to
the traditions of any nation from home with just one click, Change preposition
apply
however
I believe that personally visiting other nations will be more beneficial in the form of Add a comma
however,
latest
information.Add an article
the latest
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