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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #risks #lives
Risk is a fickle topic to discuss. Often the concept is portrayed as reckless and brash, despite there being clear benefits to executing
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 plans in both work and home
life
. In
this
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 I will outline the advantages and disadvantages of taking risks in one's
life
. To start with, let's analyze the benefits. In your professional
life
, taking chances with a high-reward,
large-loss
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the large-loss
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 business offer can lead to a large financial profit,
as well as
 opening more paths for future
endeavors
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. In personal
life
, exercising risk can train your brain to be a bit more courageous, far braver than if you were to live a safe
life
.
This
 can allow for more fulfilling experiences to be had that you
otherwise
 might not have considered, broadening your horizons. Even if you make mistakes, it's something for you to learn from, helping you to be a little more analytical.
On the other hand
, bad work ventures can lead to a significant loss in revenue, very well holding the possibility of bankrupting you and sending your world into a
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 state to be in. Taking too many dicey offers might
also
 run you down the possibility of finding yourself knee-deep in shady back alley deals with
less than trustworthy
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 types. These multiple outcomes will
also
 stress your brain quite a lot, resulting in mental conditions
such
 as depression, anxiety, and PTSD.
To conclude
, risks are equally sided with both positive and negative
impact
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,
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 as if
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 were two sides of an everyday coin.
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 I believe that with enough good judgement and analysis, living a risky career can benefit a person in their personal growth and financial situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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