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The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.

The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.
#line #demand #textile
The graph depicts the number of
textile
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textiles
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in
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of
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 four different types over
thirthy
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thirty
 five years in
millions
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millions of
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tons
 globally.
Overall
, the most popular
fiber
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fibre
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is
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was
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 cotton in 1980
,
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 but ended up with polyester in 2015.
However
, wool got the opposite. Looking in more detail,
in
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 the beginning of
reseacrh
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research
, in 1980,
textile
 demand dominated by cotton and it was increased gradually from 12
million
tons
 to 32
millions ton
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million tons
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 in 2015. The second
popular
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most popular
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of
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apply
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fiber
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fibre
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 is polyester,
started
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which started
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 at approximately 5
million
tons
 a year and
it
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experienced an
extreme
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extremely
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 significant
grew
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growth
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into
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to
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 under 70
million
tons
 a year
during
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over
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 35 years. It made cotton
being
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a
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the
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 most wanted
of
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textile
 in the world. Meanwhile, there was a slow
decreased
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 from 1980 to 1999 in
demand
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the demand
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of
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for
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 cellulosic, before it went up marginally
at
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to
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 roughly ten
million
tons
.
Whereas
, wool was
very
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a very
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 unpopular
textile
in
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apply
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global
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. It underwent a slight up from zero to five
million
tons
 in 1999 surpassing cellulosic,
altough
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although
 it backed to zero again in 2000 and
has
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had
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 just a little request
at
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in
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 2015.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words textile, tons, million with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global demand
  • Textile industry
  • Natural fibers
  • Synthetic fibers
  • Manufacturing advancements
  • Fashion trends
  • Consumer preferences
  • Economic factors
  • Purchasing power
  • Eco-friendly materials
  • Market share
  • Production capacity
  • Polyester
  • Cotton
  • Wool
  • Nylon
  • Demand curve
  • Sustainability
  • Textile innovation
  • Fluctuations
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