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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant."

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant."
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The maps give information about the development that has taken place in Science
Park
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 from 2018 to the present day.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
park
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 has been more developed with the changes in open lands, some buildings, and the introduction of some public facilities. To commence with, in the north, there was grassland, but it has disappeared and
research
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a research
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 and development building has been erected
in
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on
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this
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 site with a connected path to the offices. Meanwhile, the reception
also
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 has disappeared. Another noticeable change is that
cycling
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the cycling
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 path has been
build
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building
built
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 alongside the road, making it more
cycling friendly
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cycling-friendly
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. The parking area, in the middle of the
park
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, has become smaller than in 2008. In the south, the IT
center
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centre
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 has been converted into
innovative
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an innovative
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center
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centre
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,
while
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 the cyber security has been enlarged to the grassland beside the car
park
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, thereby the grassland has disappeared. To connect these three areas, paths have been
also
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 developed. The
last
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 striking developments are the introduction of
railway
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a railway
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 station in the south
,
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apply
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 and a bus stop in the east.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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