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Advertisements are the most important marketing startegy to enhance the sale of products ? Do you agree or disagree?

In an economy field especially for marketing at a company or institution, it can not be denied we need
advertisements
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 to promote our
product
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.
Advertisements
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 are used to introduce what kind of
product
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 we will to sell for public in
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 society.
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, our
product
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 will be knownable and citizens will interested in buying the
product
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. There are some reasons why we must use advertisement as a marketing strategy to approach all consumers.
First,
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in
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 globalization era, citizens easily know our
product
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 if we promoting in social media
such
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 as Instagram, Tiktok, and Twitter.
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, there are some types of promotion.
For example
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, in TikTok or
Instagram
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 we can use an influencer to make videos review about our
product
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. That strategy is called an endorsement.
Second,
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on
a written platforms
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a written platform
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 like Twitter or Medium, we can ask our consumers to make some posts about how beneficial our
product
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 is for them through a thread and online article so that others will be curious about the
product
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.
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, publics prefer to use e-commerce right now
such
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 as Shopee, Lazada, and Tokopedia to buy domestic stuff to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 their needs in daily life because is efficient for them to buy something without having to go to the marketplace directly. They only check out the
product
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 and make payments through an online site. So we are as sellers just applying
advertisements
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 to our e-commerce accounts. In conclusion, promoting with
advertisements
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 will benefit us to enhance the sale of products , especially in
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 modern era
which
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is
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technology is most important for us to face economic challenges.
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, social media have a crucial role in marketing strategy in society
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 as in promoting and influencing consumers.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • marketing strategy
  • enhance
  • sales
  • promote
  • brand awareness
  • attract
  • unique features
  • benefits
  • target audience
  • market share
  • influence
  • consumer behavior
  • generate demand
  • special offers
  • stimulate
  • build loyalty
  • trust
  • repeat purchases
  • perception
  • quality
  • value
  • purchasing decisions
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