The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons
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The bar chart provides
infromation
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information
about the most five popular
destination
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which
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British
citiczens
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citizens
emigrated
to
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from 2004 to 2007.
Overall
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, it can
be notice
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that Australia was the most popular place to move
during
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the period given
while
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, New Zealand and
USA
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the USA
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were least preferred by
Btritch
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British
people to migrate
among
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to
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others
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other
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contries
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countries
.
To begin
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with , it was around 42000
of
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British citizens emigrated to Australia in 2004 . And it increased
sharpaly
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sharply
to over 5000 in 2006 before falling down in
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last
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the last
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year. The next most popular country for Britons to move to was Spain. it declined over the time frame to finish at below 30,000 in 2007. Approximately 20,000 people migrated to New Zealand from
UK
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each year,
while
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for
USA
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the USA
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the number fluctuated between 20,000 to 25,000 over the period. In
addaitions
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addition
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, the number of people who
emgirsted
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emigrated
migrated
from
Britsh
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Britain
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to France stood at 22000 in 2004 before
jumbing
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jumping
to over 3000 in 2005 . And in the
last
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two years witnessed a decline.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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