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Band 4.5

Some people say it is a waste of time to plan for future. It is more important to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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I completely disagree with the statement
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 planning the
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 is a waste of time. People who hold the argument
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 planning the
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as
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 an
unecessary
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unnecessary
 effort are often blinded
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 the fact that there are many individuals who failed
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 their job and
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, simply because they did not illustrate how their
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 are going to be.
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, the
future
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 is where we strive by ourselves, where we will form possibly a new family, personality, and life.
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, it is important for individuals to draw and decide which way they will take in the
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 to assist them reach succession easily. Planning for the
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 can be conducted in
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several forms, but it all
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 with
a
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research. There is a quote that says, "the more you know, the more you don't know"
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 interpretation of the saying is that
one
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 must widen his/her knowledge to understand what
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 really wants.
A research
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 may help the planner to collect the options just for
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 to pick later. After picking what the planner wants to pursue in the
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, it is time for
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brainstorming. Brainstorming is when the individual
breakdown
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breaks down
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 what efforts
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he/she can
do
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 to add the possibility for
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/
she
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her
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 to reach the dream.
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,
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 must
aware
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 of the challenges that will hinder the process,
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, it is recommended for the planner to
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 out what he/she will do if the challenges are blocking the way to pursue the goal.
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,
although
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 drawing
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 plan for the
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 is needed,
one
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 must focus on the present too. Do not just
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 and
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 the aims, put actions on them. In conclusion, planning the
future
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 is crucial for individuals, but do not forget to live
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 moment and put
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effort
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on
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 our
dream
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dreams
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.

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task achievement
To improve task response, ensure that you address all parts of the prompt fully. This involves exploring both sides of the argument, especially if you 'disagree' with the statement, which requires you to articulate why others may think differently and then refute their points.
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Make sure your main ideas are clear and well-developed. Expand on the ideas with more detailed examples and explanations to show a deeper understanding of the topic.
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Whenever possible, use specific examples to support your arguments. This could involve citing research, statistics, or real-world cases to make your essay more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay in a logical manner, with each paragraph flowing naturally to the next. Use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas and ensure the reader can follow your argument without effort.
coherence cohesion
Every essay should have a clear introduction that sets the tone and a conclusion that summarizes the main points and restates the writer's position. Make sure these are distinct and conclude the essay effectively.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • focus on the present
  • wasting time
  • planning for the future
  • present moment
  • long-term goals
  • career advancements
  • personal development
  • financial stability
  • satisfaction and happiness
  • fully engaging
  • immediate circumstances
  • lack of preparedness
  • potential challenges
  • balanced approach
  • pragmatic solution
  • present experiences
  • paving the way
  • impulsive decisions
  • clearer direction
  • anticipate risks
  • mitigate
  • secure and stable future
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