You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The charts give information about the percentages of individual careers by job sector and gender for Australians in the previous year.
Overall
, it can be seen that
males
have dominated in several
sectors
such
as managers, semi-professionals,
tradespeople
, production, and
labourers
.
Then
, the lowest area of work for
males
was
labourers
while
for women it was the
tradespeople
and production
sectors
. As the highest interest of job
sectors
for
males
, there is no significant between
tradespeople
and clerical at 900% and approximately 880%. Around 650%
males
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of males
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have employed persons in the
professionals
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category followed by managers at 600%. The remaining
sectors
such
as production and semi-professional just under 500% and a small number of male employment
labourers
about 400%. Interestingly, the job types for women had the highest ratio of clerical almost 1000%. After that, there is much of a difference between professionals and semi-professionals at 700% and approximately 350%. It is followed by
labourers
around 250%. The areas of work
tradespeople
and manufacture have the same ratio at 100% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, sectors, tradespeople, labourers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employed persons
  • job type
  • sex
  • employment figures
  • gender distribution
  • full-time
  • part-time
  • casual
  • professionals
  • managers
  • technicians
  • service workers
  • clerical staff
  • laborers
  • skilled trades
  • predominantly
  • discrepancy
  • proportionally
  • sectors
  • industries
  • dominance
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