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Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.

Chorleywood is a village near London whose population has increased steadily since the middle of the nineteenth century. The map below shows the development of the village. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the village.
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The map shows the development of Chorleywood village from 1868 to 1994. The development stages
is
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 grouped into 4 stages:
stage
 1 (1868-1883),
stage
 2 (1883-1922),
stage
 3 (1922-1970, and
stage
 4 (1970-1994).
Overall
, as the inhabitants had become significantly higher in number, the residential grew denser.
Initially
, Chorleywood
onnly
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only
have
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 two main
road
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roads
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 on the
noth
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north
side
 and the west
side
.
Besides
, there were only a small group of houses on the right
side
 of the western main road. Two decades later, more houses were built next to the previous complex
as well as
new
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a new
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 railway that
passing
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passed
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 through the new residential. In the third
stage
, more people lived in the area,
occupied
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and occupied
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 land around the second residential.
Furthermore
,
at the end
 of
this
 period, the mobility
were
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was
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 improved by constructed motorway on the east
side
 of the village.
As a consequence
,
in
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from
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 1970
-
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to
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1994, more people moved to
the
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apply
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Chorleywood, building their
house
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houses
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 all around the city, following the road path.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • population
  • increased steadily
  • middle of the nineteenth century
  • development
  • location
  • factors
  • contributing
  • physical
  • infrastructural
  • effects
  • conclusion
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