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Some businessses find that their new employess lack basic interpersonal skills such as skill. What are the causes and suggest possible solutions.

#businessses #employess #lack #skills #skill
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companies
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the
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problems with the new
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employees
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esecially
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especially
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relationships
 accept and intract with customers for some causes
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 will discuss in my essay and
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 will expose some solutions
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, all the companies have the same common
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weaknesses
points
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wich
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the
releationships
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relationships
relationship
skills
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nowadays
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"soft
skills
 " like
critcal
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critical
 thinking and OQ all of these
skills
 are very important in any company system .
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 there are some reasons behind these problems that many
copmanies
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companies
 suffer it ,
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 the studies
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in
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 the
professionl
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professional
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not
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 the human
skills
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secondly
secondary
, the
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relationships
 need practice with real and
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 need time and
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,
Additionally
 many people think
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 not necessary ,for all before there are
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A variety
 has been suggestions to tackle these causes ,The first one is the studies should be
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included
 the
skills
 the employment need ,
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, every company should
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 worker time to practice with the real and do
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relationships
with others . In conclusion ,soft
skills
 should be developed for all people in the world
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because
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a person
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person
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increased
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 and have
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a good
 chance in
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 in his life .
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