The maps below shows the town of Lynnfield in 1936 and then later in 2007.

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The maps provide data about the town called Lynnfield in 1936 and in 2007.

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, Lynnfield became much more modern and developed, with more entertainment facilities and accommodation. As can clearly be seen, in 1936 there were 3 trees,

however

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, in 2007, 2 of them were cut down. In 1936 there was only a river,

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in 2007 there was a residential area.

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of the cycle path in

2007

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2007,

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there was a road. The government office was turned into

museum

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a museum

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whereas

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farm land

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farmland

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was turned into

golf

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a golf

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course. Both in 1936 and 2007

bank

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banks

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library

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libraries

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and post

office

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offices

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remained the same,

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sweet

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shop

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shops

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, butchers and flower

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shop

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shops

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saw some changes. Sweet

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shop

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shops

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and butchers were united and turned into a supermarket.

Flower

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The flower

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shop

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was turned into

travel

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a travel

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agent. In 1936, there was nothing between the post office, sweet

shop

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, butchers, flower

shop

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, bank, and library.

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, by 2007, a shopping

center

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centre

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had been established in that location.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shop with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

159 words

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The maps below shows the town of Lynnfield in 1936 and then later in 2007.

Some people believe that nations and individuals should focus on their own problems because it is impossible to help everyone in the world since there are so many needs. To what extents do you agree or disagree.

Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think having a university degree is the best way to secure a good job. However, others believe skills and experience are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some people believe a high salary is the most important factor when choosing a job. Others believe that a good working environment is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.