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The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008.

The chart below gives some of the most reported issues among people living in UK cities in 2008.
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The table shows information about the most reported living
issues
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 for people
that
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apply
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living in UK
cities
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 in 2018.
Overall
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, the biggest problem in each
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cities
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city
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 was health services,
then
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 in the second place was education and training.
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, the fewest problems
was
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were
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 from
the
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apply
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air
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 pollution. It is reported that the
percentages
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 of health services
issues
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 dominated in the whole
cities
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 in
UK
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the UK
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, the biggest
percentages
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 hit on Belfast and Cardiff about more than a half
percentages
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 of the whole
issues
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.
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, the next place was education and training. There were not any significant differences in each
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cities
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city
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, but the biggest
percentages
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goes
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go
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 to Glasgow and London, they approximately hit more than a half from the living
issues
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.
Moreover
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, the
least
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biggest
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issues
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issue
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 that had been going
in
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on in
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 each
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cities
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city
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 was
air
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polution
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pollution
. The cleanest
air
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 quality in
UK
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the UK
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 was in Newcastle since they only hit less than ten
percents
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percent
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 from all
type
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types
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 of
issues
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.
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, Manchester clearly had
air
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 pollution because it is reported that they hit more than ten
percents
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percent
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 of the
all over
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all-over
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words issues, cities, air, percentages with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • affordable housing
  • urban areas
  • overcrowding
  • homelessness
  • traffic congestion
  • car ownership
  • public transportation systems
  • commuting times
  • air pollution
  • industrial activities
  • air quality
  • green spaces
  • urbanization
  • mental health
  • crime rates
  • socio-economic factors
  • sense of security
  • waste management
  • waste disposal
  • recycling
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